The was a boy called Noal. He didnt like dragons but his villige did. He was a roller of the villige. But he wanted to get rid of the dragons. But he hierd poeple to kill the dragons. But the villige bourt a black smith. So he can get weapons to kill the poeple. Hoe are working for Noel. But the villige killed the poeple and killed Noel. But there was a new roller called joul north. Evreyone loved hem.But then mister north became the roller of the earth. Also dragons was alowd there own island. But mister north has became a brilent teacher. THE END p.s. i hope you like it thank you it will be creat if you give a like or a comment.
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January 27, 2015 at 8:11 am
I love this Nathan! You know what would be really great? If you let me print this for our Form Wall in my room. Would you like to illustrate it for me?
Miss Critchley
January 27, 2015 at 8:13 am
Hello Nathan,
There appears to be a character in your story that sounds very familiar. I like the idea of a dragon slayer that secretly likes dragons and has to hire somebody else to do his job.
Targets:
– Try writing a plan for your next instalment – this will help you to develop your ideas
– How else might you start a sentence other than using But – where might the but be replaced with a comma to help form a longer sentence?
– Are your full stops in the right place – try to read your work aloud to so that you might hear where the full stops and commas should be.
January 27, 2015 at 8:14 am
Nice idea!
January 27, 2015 at 3:36 pm
Nathan, this really made me laugh this morning! I’m unsure how Mr . North would really do when he was faced with a real life dragon. Maybe we should try to find one?
Mr North’s targets are very good. I can’t wait to see the next draft!